Delaney Megahan
Mrs. Belden
Honors English 1
October 15th, 2014
Our Swing
People say cancer controls your life, but I don’t let it control mine. It might be able to take me over and end my life but I am fighting my hardest to stay alive. The one person who keeps me fighting and fighting my hardest is my soul mate, my other half, the love of my life, my wife. I will keep fighting until I can no longer fight. Until I can no longer breathe. Until I feel I fought my hardest and its time to grab Gods hand, feel him pick up and then I rise.
I walk into the doctors office. If the scans show no improvement of the cancer dying down what am going to say to Mary? There’s no cure and she knows it. She checks on me every hour during the night to make sure I’m still breathing. I see Dr. Autumn every week, this started in June and it’s now July. She said the cancer is spreading like a wild fire. Mary didn’t take that very well…
“Hi Kreg, how are you feeling today?”
“Besides cancer almost being everywhere in my body, like a million bucks”
“Have you told Mary about your time limit yet?”
“I don’t think the thought of your husband only having about a week to live would settle well.”
“Okay, but she needs to know sooner or later.”
We head towards the CAT scan room, the doctors office is very clean, all the walls are a baby blue color and the office smells like cough drops. We then enter the CAT scan room, it makes me cringe. The scanning process takes about an hour. You would think just laying down for an hour and no one disturbing you would be nice, but its not when its over and you get bad results. So far it is in my liver, brain, kidney, and colon. I am doing chemo but it just doesn’t seem worth the pain if I’m going to die anyway, but Mary insists I continue. You can’t not listen to the women you have loved for 40 years. Once the scan is done I head home and am told that the results will be in by tomorrow morning. When I get home the first thing I do is go outside. We have a 100 Year old hickory tree in our backyard. We attached a bench seat swing to ropes and tied it around a high branch. It is the most peaceful and beautiful spot. If I could, I would just die on my swing looking over the countryside, relaxing and enjoying the view with no worry in the world. Mary comes outside and sits right next to me. She is the most beautiful women in the world, with her dark brown hair and big brown, gentle eyes. I knew when I met her she was the person I wanted to spend the rest of my life with.
“What did Dr. Autumn say?”
“We won’t get the results back till tomorrow morning. How was your day?”
“Okay. It was good. Kreg we’ll make it through this, I was looking at stuff online and they said 80% of people make it. Have you asked Autumn if she knows a time limit?”
“No, she said that I have nothing to worry about. No need to worry.”
This is one reason why I can’t tell her. As long as I spend as much of my time with her as I can we both will be happy. We sit for a while on the swing and admire the quietness. When it started
getting dark we headed inside our small but warming house. Lately, Mary has been cooking like Betty Crocker. I can’t wait to eat dinner every night. The thought of not eating with her every night, or staring into her eyes before I go to bed makes my heart ache. But I can’t tell her that or she will get a hint I don’t have that much longer with her.
I wake up to her staring at me, I smile and gradually get up and start to head for the kitchen. Before I make it out of the room she says,
“If something happens I don’t know what I would do without you.”
I look straight into her eyes and say
“I am going nowhere”
she smiles at me with a small warming smile.
“How about we go and do something today? You love going to art museums we can go to one today!”
“You aren’t very fond of art museums, are you okay?”
“I am totally fine I just thought we would do something fun today.”
“Okay, off to the art museum!”
It felt like we stayed at the museum for a millennium, it was interesting but I was just happy to see Mary having a good time. The museum is 3 stories of all types of art lining the white walls in the bright rooms. She just admired all the work then we went out to get ice cream at our favorite ice cream shop “Missouri’s Finest”. It’s where we first met. I know an ice cream shop doesn’t sound romantic to meet the love of your life, but when you see and right then and there know
you want to spend the rest of your life with them, it doesn’t really matter. We then head home. When we got home I went straight to be I was exhausted.
I woke up to the sounds of the birds chirping, thats one positive to living in the country even though it is 6 in the morning. I layed in bed thinking about what we should do today, I think I might tell Mary my time limit. I look around our room. Our dresser is directly in front of our bed with our wedding pictures. Theres one picture of Mary and I sitting on our swing looking out to the country while the sun’s setting. Maybe I will paint a sign to hang on our swing that says “Our Swing” in orange, yellow and red. I will go out and get it today. I get up and get dressed. I then go to the kitchen and get a cup of coffee. Cause the best way to waking up is folgers in my cup. After I have my coffee I head to a hardware store and buy a wooden sign, paint brushes, and paint. When I get home Mary is still asleep so I start painting my sign. The first coat of paint is a misty grey, I let it sit for an hour. Then I start painting the “our swing” in orange, red and yellow. It reminds me of a sunset. That takes about another hour to sit so I am totally done by 10am . I check on Mary and she is awake. I tell her to come outside when she is ready. I then quickly rush to the swing. I set the sign on the swing and sit right beside it. I am so excited to see her face. I then feel a sharp pain in my chest and my body feels weak and slow. The last thing I remember is slowly closing my eyes to the quietness and beauty of the country. If only I stayed long enough to see Mary’s beautiful eyes and her reaction to my surprise. If only I told her my limited time so we could of spent more time together. If only...
Very interesting story! Lots of depressing stories about cancer by the way... Anyways I loved how you had the character never tell his wife, it kept a lot of suspense. One suggestion is fix your paragraphs, they looked a little messed up when I read them. I also like when you go through the visit with the doctor and the protectionist. Great story!
ReplyDeleteThis story is amazing! I like how you displayed the main characters emotions through his actions. It was really cute how he did stuff to make his wife happy even though he didn't have much time left. I also enjoyed how you gave us some details about how they met and how long they have been married. One suggestion I have is to maybe use some more descriptive words in some parts of the story. I really enjoyed reading your story! You did a great job!
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Your story was fantastic! I really liked how you showed how much Grayson loves his wife. I was on the edge of my seat waiting to see what happened. The only suggestion I would have would to be to characterize Grayson a little more. You wrote the story very well and I really did like it!
ReplyDeleteYour story was a great read and I really enjoyed it! You show the love the narrator feels towards his wife and that was a big emotional part in the story. My favorite part of your story was at the end when the narrator was so excited to paint the sign for Mary. This showed that the littlest things mattered to him and his relationship, which is a good thing. The beginning of the story "hooked" me because it's a nice introduction to the narrators life with cancer and how he deals with it. It's a very descriptive part of the story. The end of the story was great, the last few sentences being the best. Even though it ends at a cliffhanger, I could assume what happened and what was going to happen. The story is well organized and summed up all loose ends that were mentioned in the beginning of the story. You can clearly state what the conflict, rising action, falling action and climax were. I would suggest to look over your grammar and punctuation. How did Mary react when she went outside? Also, did she ever find out that he only had a week to live? You had nice imagery and your word choice was great! I really enjoyed your story!
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ReplyDeleteSorry I said my full name the first comment! Oops!
ReplyDeleteDear Delany,
Very sad story. Makes me thankful that I don't have cancer at the moment. One thing that I think you did well was describing the setting very well. I felt like I was somewhere in the Missouri countryside! Another thing that I felt you did well was very believable. You added facts that I didn't know about cancer and methods of removing that I felt really improved the quality of the story. Another thing I think you did well was that you delivered the theme very well. It wasn't cheesy or a cliche. One question I have is how is he saying this stuff if he's dead? Is he in Heaven? Another question I have is why didn't he tell her about his limited time? A suggestion I have is to add where he is writing or saying all of this stuff. A great depressing but great story!
Good Job, Camden D.
Delaney,
ReplyDeleteThat was a really good story, it was sad but very we'll thought out and put together. The man in the story seemed very kind and generous, and I liked how he tried to pretend he didn't even have cancer. He seemed to go through the story very happily.Your story was very entertaining and I wanted to keep reading on and on. The only suggestion I have might be to give a deeper discription of the narrators apearence and name. Overall it was a really good story I enjoyed reading.
Leia